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All Deviations
All Deviations


Definite clarity of feeling
Is what I'm lacking this evening
And has been for quite a while
Don't worry, I'll smile
That's hypocritical, I bet
I worry all the time, and yet
So does everyone else
Be it chasing love, dreams or wealth
And I don't know everything
It may just be I'm here to bring
A warning to anyone who follows my path
But I hope that's not why I'm here, at last
Some feeling unlocked by pen power
In a place by my computer tower
At a time approaching a new midnight
And leaving the last one just as fast, quite
Unconnected these sentences may be
Somewhere in my mind they make sense to me
Encapsulated in a vat of information
That holds all emotion, happiness, frustration
Anguish, ecstasy, desire, and so
Does this driver know where to go?
©2008 ~Rlopez10
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Feeling (excuse the pun) poetic.

Goodnight!
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~ai-love-gaara:iconai-love-gaara: Mar 20, 2008, 1:13:47 AM
I love poetry!

PS: What was the pun? :confused:
~Rlopez10:iconRlopez10: Mar 20, 2008, 3:17:58 AM
Cause I used the word 'feeling' and the first line of the poem is about the 'lack of', heh

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~ai-love-gaara:iconai-love-gaara: Mar 21, 2008, 6:01:22 AM
lol, so u were feeling poetic yet the resulting poem mentioned how you were feeling nothing, eh?
~laurabeth:iconlaurabeth: Mar 21, 2008, 4:45:43 PM
Wow, Rlo. This is quite impressive :) I really love how it ends, and... it's very deep. It's like two styles of poetry squished together, so that in some parts it is a bit awkward (mostly the word 'information' seems out of place among all the softness of the other words). You did a really great job. Some poetry has me struggling to understand, but I saw this quite well 8D

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~Rlopez10:iconRlopez10: Mar 21, 2008, 6:59:50 PM
Yeah, lol :)

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~Rlopez10:iconRlopez10: Mar 21, 2008, 7:10:37 PM
:) well, thanks Laura

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